Thread:Jester of chaos/@comment-24758512-20150407150208/@comment-4708882-20150407201316

◾ ZeroPercentApprovalRating: She was hated and disapproved for EVERY SINGLE ONE in this spin-off. Besides being the most hated character in the story, she was also the most feared. - Just replace "for" with "of by".

◾ AlwaysSecondBest: Minerva was considered the second most powerful wizard in the SSS when Artemisia was in the organization. She later passed Artemisia after had stolen the Lion unit and finally became the most powerful of the SSS. - replace "had" with "having" and add person/individual between "powerful" and "of".

◾ AloneWithThePsycho: Cecil was unfortunately an victim of this moment. While Cecil watched Artemisia in a coma in a hospital, Minerva came also to see Artemisia. Until then everyone thought Minerva was concerned about Artemisia, however, the story was not that. Minerva almost cut off Cecil's arm with a laser sword without giving any warning. Minerva simply was about to cut off the arm out of her own partner in a public place with no one around. - I think if you replace "an" with "a" and remove word "out" of the part about cutting off her partners arm it will be good.

◾ AxCrazy: When she's not masturbating drunk with power or patrulling Tenguu City, she is sexually, physically and psychologically torturing her opponents ForTheEvulz. - Possibly take out "masturbating" and just fix "patrulling" to "Patrolling" and it will be good.

◾ BadassBack: The back of her Lion unit resemble to 4 large spider legs that appear iron wings. - The back of her Lion unit resemble 4 large spider legs that appear function as iron wings.

◾ BarehandedBladeBlock: Just her bare fist is sufficient to stop and break a sword as sharp as the . - just add "enough" between "sufficient" and "to".

◾ BerserkButton: During the final battle, Minerva was confident of herself after she had been more powerful with Lion unit of the Ashcroft Series. However, when Mikie managed to find an opening to strike Minerva, she "really" lost her calm and happiness, and quickly went crazy and psychotic. - just add "so" before "confident" and replace "been" with "become".

◾ BiggerBad: Minerva began her introduction as a minor character that first appeared in a flashback. However, she has become the biggest threat throughout the spin-off after the scientist Edgar F. Carroll hired her to retrieve the Ashcroft Series units that were stolen by 3 SSS Wizards who were trying to save Artemisia of DEM's claws. Edgar was about to discover that evil is not toy, and that he would regret that he had condemned all the poor lives that were around him. Once she made her appearance in Volume 3, Minerva gradually slowly replaces Excuse Plot of the story. After she had stolen a CR-unitof the Ashcroft-Series, she simply betrayed Edgar after she achieved what she always wanted, and quickly became the true main antagonist of the spin-off. - just change "unitof" to "unit of".

◾ BloodfromTheMouth / TearsOfBlood: During the final battle against Minerva, Mikie attacked Minerva numberless times before she falls disabled. Once Mikie finished her attacks, Minerva was completely bloodied while a large amount of blood was coming out from her eyes, nose and mouth. - simply replace "numberless" with "countless".

◾ CombatSadomasochist: This happens only when Minerva was insane. She was attacked and beaten numberless times, however, she was smiling insanely like she was enjoying it. - replace "numberless" with "numerous".

◾ TheConspiracy: She conspired against Edgar from the time she was hired by him in order to use him to gain power, ego and revenge. - just say something like "stroke her ego and revenge" instead of simply ego.

◾ DeathGlare: This happened when Minerva was defeated for the first time by Wizards of the SSS and AST. When everyone thought was dead Minerva, Minerva gave a fatal attack in Cecil while everyone was off guard. When all looked back, they saw Minerva with a facial expression that represented "pure death". - just change "When everyone thought was dead Minerva," to "When everyone thought Minerva was dead,".

◾ TheDreaded: Everyone fears her. EVERYONE. That Origami gets along with her shocks many. - just change "That" to "How".

◾ KickThemWhileTheyAreDown: She does this accompanied with a KickTheDog. She knocks Mikie easily and crushes her skull with such brute force that the ground breaks. Even when Mikie was almost dead due to Minerva's brute strength, she still kicked her body several times. -just say "She knocks out Mikie easily and crushes her skull with such brute force that the ground breaks.".

◾ TheParanoiac: When Artemisia made a scar in Minerva's left eye, she got extremely crazy and paranoid in killing Artemisia. - you might want to change "she got extremely crazy and paranoid in killing Artemisia." to "she got extremely paranoid, crazy and obsessed in killing Artemisia.".

◾ TermsOfEndangerment: She gives many offensive nicknames for various people, and all of hates because of that. - simply change it to something like "She gives many offensive nicknames to various people, and all of them hate her because of that among other reasons".

◾ TheUnfettered: She does not care about anything as she reaches her goal. She is willing to commit any atrocity for revenge. And all this because of a simple scar that was caused by her own cowardice! - just add "long as" between "as" and "she".

◾ YouGotSpunk: She openly says she hates courage of people who rise up against her. - just add "the" right before "courage".

◾ YouHaveOutlivedYourUsefulness: She joined with Edgar only to get what she wanted. When she got what she wanted, she betrayed Edgar after manipuled him. - simply change "manipuled" into "manipulating"

The rest look good man. Sorry it took so long my laptop kept overheating and if it looks like I'm nit-picking just putting down the changes I would make or mistakes I saw.