User blog comment:ResonX/Lord Reson/@comment-5070377-20120812001929

Rofl; this guy looks completely mental in appearance, on some Bobobo-bo-Bo-Bobo shit (If you saw that anime or read the manga you'd know how retarded and just flat out weird that series is) however that aside. The fact he wants to take over the Underworld and the entirety of the "Nava-verse" is OBVIOUSLY cliche to the max. Uncertain origins, isn't that how it usually works? :P

Another "he was in the beginning" type, eh? Lol, seriously what more needs to be said...

I stopped reading at the succubus bride load.

P.S: I also noticed some grammar fails here or there.

Overal rating: Well seeing as you wanted a professional critique; here yeah go. Alot of stuff here sounds pretty cool and I see potential so - 5.7/10

Lol, read a little more... I'm totally spotting more cliches now, yeaaah 5.7 seems fair.

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