Thread:Jester of chaos/@comment-5959298-20180608210320/@comment-4708882-20180707192050

I'd change "In the Third Class Dining Room, a passenger asks if they can not go up." to "In the Third Class Dining Room, a passenger asks why they can't go up.", "Hart asks him why he keep saying that when there's every bloody danger, yet Turnbull ignores him." to "Hart asks him why he keep saying that when there's indeed danger, yet Turnbull ignores him.", "In the Third Class Dining Room, David Evans asks if the passengers can not go up." to "In the Third Class Dining Room, David Evans asks why the passengers can't go up.". To be honest a lot of episode 3 sounds like repeating what has been already said and arguably redundant for part of it.