Thread:Jester of chaos/@comment-24758512-20160403145723/@comment-4708882-20160403172924

I'm doing a few corrections though one of them I can't fix is in part one it says: "After a few hours, the general went to the forest with his armored and parked in the middle forest alone carrying an assault rifle without using any protective armor." it's just not mentioning what type of vehicle is armored and ends up parked.

Part two: I have a correction when Leonardo and Jinsei are on the phone is it where it's like modern phones where they aren't seeing each other or can they each other like people can with web cams? I ask cause if so I'll need to make a very minor correction.

Part three: Is Hlokust cannon supposed to be that or Holocaust cannon.

I had to add and change a little wording so if it's ok I'd like you to double check if it was good enough. Hope that's okay with you and I'm willing to add the vehicle and those changes just want to make sure first.