Thread:Jester of chaos/@comment-29414935-20190923113331/@comment-29414935-20191115125343

Ok thanks.

I try something in this story. I try to make it a story who is brutal and bloody but without many murders caused directly. They always die in circumstances and often not caused by someone. Even the most evilest villain in this story isn't a murderer at all (We talked about him and if he would count as Pure Evil). There are only two characters who killed someone, the other one indirectly. The first one is a corrupt cop who killed one of the main characters and manipulated the proofs to blame the main characters for it and that it looks like they had killed their friend. And the other one is the main protagonist who pushes the villain down a platform which leds in him being impaled by sharp pipes, out of self defense. It's more indirectly.

Like I also said, I want to slow down with all these murders and deaths. Because I have the feeling I'm exaggerate in killing off too many characters or let them be murderers very often. Either it's not very fitting for the story or it's just too much murder and unnecessary. A story isn't good because of how many people are dying or being murdered, it's because of the plot and emotion. Sure it always is a part of it, but it depends on how it is played and portrayed. I must learn that and try something new and different. Also, I think murderers who kill innocents and especially friends or loved ones of the heroes, are much more harder to forgive and work together, than villains who murder someone who deserved it (like their own minions for example or another villain) or who never kills anyone. Even if he/she tries to kill the heroes all the time. But attempting is different from succeeding in murder.

Also, like I said, I don't know if some stories of mine are too brutal and bloody, where I actually don't really want it to be that extreme. I didn't made the detective story with the Wolf Lady explicity brutal and bloody, with the first part, being the most intense from all four (and the spin-off story from her). But there isn't shown a explicit violent and bloody scene, except the torture scene from the assassin, where he tortures the judge. But I don't know yet, how to portray it. I want to portray him as very disgusting and sadistic, but also don't want it to go over the extreme. So I thought of a scene where the Wolf Lady is on the way to kill him and she finds him in an abandoned factory. She stalks him and the gangsterbosses other men and sees how he brutally tortures the judge in cutting deep slots all over his body to let him bleed out gruesomely. But now I don't know if he's going to scream in pain and agony and also is scared and crying and we actually see the torture or if that's over the top. The other option that comes in my mind is, that the torture scene isn't really shown and just he with all covered in blood and slots all over his body and how he is passed out. But he wakes up and isn't really dead yet and then the assassin is shooting him in the head, killing him for good. In my opinion the second one is better, it's not over the top but still gruesome. What do you think?