Thread:Jester of chaos/@comment-29414935-20190706142344/@comment-29414935-20190831150129

The only thing I'm not so proud of and trying to change, is to make a real surprising villain in the first part of the story. Because the other two parts aren't that "true detective crime story" anymore and more action then. And the first one doesn't have a surprising one but the other two have. That's kinda weird and unlogical. I mean in the first part, we know from the beginning that the murderer of the Wolf Ladys sister and the crime boss who causes terror in the entire city is the gangsterboss and he is so good and "disappeared from the radar" that the police can't catch him and know who he really is hiding. So that would be the only thing the detective must solve, but they already know who the main bad guy is, just not where he is. Is that enough?

Because in the second part, it's the female hacker who was first a member of the police department, and a minor role in the first part, but turned into an hacker criminal because her family got murdered by an corrupt cop and the police and everyone didn't gave him a real punishment. So she kills him herself and wants to take revenge on the police department in leaking all the data so criminals can know everything about them and they are not save in life anymore. And the other surprise villain is the uncle in the third part, who lies to his niece and friends in helping him and reveals himself to be the enforcer of the main villain. The main villain, I don't know if he is also a surprise villain or not. Because having two would be too much in one part, or not? And you also can somehow count the Wolf Lady as an "surprising villain" too, because at the very end, she becomes a real antagonist who tries to kill the gangster boss what her friends try to stop.