Thread:Jester of chaos/@comment-26465129-20150720150203/@comment-4708882-20150726130917

Whiles it looks fairly good I'd highly recommend you do three things:

1. Tell us more about the virus/villainous acts.

2. Not calling characters "Persistent Bastard" or anything similar. However you can use quotes that use those kind of words as otherwise it seems more opinion and somewhat unprofessional.

3. This would be simply telling us what's he's from.